NYC Midnight Challenge – 250 words – December 2020

(An oldie, but I’m trying to clean up my NYC Midnight Challenge Post page.)

DArk TanGles

December 2020 (Round 1)
Genre: Drama
Action: Haircut
Word: Charge
Time Constraint: 24 hours
Length: 250 words

Pulling a brush absently through her waterfall of midnight hair, Lylaโ€™s deadened eyes stared at the sharp steel blades resting next to the bathroomโ€™s cloudy mirror. With every brushstroke, another memory peeked through the showerโ€™s lingering fog.

There was Josh, tall and handsome, curling a lock around a loving finger. Another sweep of the bristles, and he folded her into his warm arms, pressing his lips to the pale line parting the sable curtains of her waves.

Lyla pulled harder, breaking through the wet, crackling snarls, and a different mirror reflected back at her, spotless and bright, as she braided an ebony plait to cover the purpling bruise on her temple.

She yanked again, and Joshโ€™s strong fingers clawed into her scalp to drag her across the kitchen, stray black strands sticking to the scarlet gushing from her nose.

Dragging the brush through the knots one last time, she replayed herself winding her curls under a stained beanie and boarding the musty greyhound bus in her desperate charge cross-country to finally collapse at her sisterโ€™s doorstep with matted, greasy hair still tucked under the dirty cap and the bruises yellowing around her eyes.

Sobs now choking her breath, Lyla threw the brush down in a jarring clatter. With a scream, she grabbed the waiting kitchen shears and hacked through the dark tangles of hair and memories, the heavy locks pooling at her feet.

Chest heaving and cropped hair jagged, she glared back at the mirror, eyes still swollenโ€”but furiously alive.


This one came in 3rd place in my group, and I got to advance to the next round. The feedback is below!

WHAT THE JUDGES LIKED ABOUT YOUR STORY

{1774}  This built with such compelling intensity. The imagery with Lyla’s black hair through the stages of her relationship with Josh worked powerfully to convey the escalating abuse and deteriorating bond. The violent haircut felt like the shedding of much more than hair. Well done!

{2024)  I enjoyed how the author incorporated the topic of domestic abuse into what could be a simple story about a haircut. I thought the transitions to the flashbacks through the strokes of brushing Lyla’s hair felt surprisingly natural and very cinematic. I appreciated that we could feel the build in tension from the absent pulling of the brush all the way to the hacking through the dark tangles at the end. I also appreciated the variety in the author’s descriptions / metaphors.

{1953}  I love how the author artfully used the mirror as a kind of time capsule (a very effective narrative-condensing strategy in such a short story)!

WHAT THE JUDGES FEEL NEEDS WORK

{1774}  Lyla’s hair must have represented something Josh loved and used to his advantage. Share if he insisted on her wearing it long, exhibiting another area of control. That would make her hair liberation all the more sweet. To preserve word count, you might cut the “…matted, greasy hair still tucked under the dirty cap …” line, as you already describe her hair as she put the cap on before boarding the bus.

{2024)  My only confusion (super irrelevant to the plot) was about the texture of Lyla’s hair. It’s described as a “waterfall of midnight hair” and “sable curtains of her waves”. Then later as “wet, cracking snarls” and “curls”. It’s inconsequential to the story, and I appreciated the variance in descriptions, but the stray thought gave me pause while reading.

{1953}  I recommend that the author reserve elevated descriptive words for the most emotionally charged details. Lines like “the pale line parting the sable curtains of her waves” compete (in a less-than productive way) with the emotional impact of her “matted, greasy hair still tucked under the dirty cap.” While I understand that the author is trying to develop a contrast, it might be a more effective contrast if some descriptive language was trimmed back in the earlier lines about Lyla’s hair (ex: “the pale line parting the sable curtains of her waves”  could be pared down to “the pale line parting her waves”).

NYC Midnight Challenge – 250 words – Feb 2021

(An oldie, but trying to clean up my NYC Midnight Challenge Entry Page since it’s getting crowded.)

Memories of lilIes

February 2021 (Round 2)
Genre: Drama
Action: Opening a laptop
Word: Show
Time Constraint: 1 day
Length: 250 words

Thanks so much to the Academy of the Heart and Mind for publishing this one! You can find it here. This was my 2nd round entry and did not place, but the feedback is below.

WHAT THE JUDGES LIKED ABOUT YOUR STORY

{2008}  This is a very well done story. It holds reader interest. It develops and unfolds effectively, and the reader does feel for the characters. The social comment is superior. 

{2007}  I love the details in this piece–the lilies from mom sparking the Google search, the suit he would’ve hated, his homely cat, and then the final moment where the narrator decides to send lilies to his grave. All of these things add up to a vivid world for this story to have happened in, and they make the piece more believable through their specificity. 

{2022}  The ideas behind this story are very poignant to read right now, for obvious reasons. I liked how you first depict the internet as a life-line connecting your protagonist to memories of past intimacy, and then as a vessel bringing a fresh sense of loss. That duality was powerful. 

WHAT THE JUDGES FEEL NEEDS WORK

{2008}  It would be helpful to have more background information, especially in the first paragraph? And while it does not exactly matter, why do lilies remind ‘her’ of ‘him’? 

{2007}  Something you might add in revision, if you decide to revise, is some kind of interaction between the narrator and the ex through flashbacks. It’s hard to feel emotionally attached to someone we only see through a Google search, and it’s hard to feel sad about the death of someone we have no emotional attachment to as a reader–but a tender moment, or a heartfelt memory, will help to spark an emotional reaction in the reader. 

{2022}  Maybe this is just me, but I think there would be more narrative coherence in this story if your protagonist’s ex had died of covidโ€“or if the irony of him dying in any other way during the pandemic were incorporated somehow. I think this would add an interesting coat of commentary.

2021 NYC Midnight Challenge – Short Story

(It’s an oldie, but I’m posting to clean up my NYC Midnight Challenge Link Page.)

Secrets in the seams

January 2021 (Round 1)
Prompt: Historical Fiction
Theme: Vengeance
Character: Seamstress
Time Constraint: 8 days
Length: 2500 words

Once, they had gathered in the square for bustling markets and merry festivals, but now that food was scarce and joy scarcer, they gathered for an execution. The Germans hadnโ€™t said thatโ€™s why theyโ€™d been summoned, but theyโ€™d all heard the rumors bleeding from the other villages. Secrets were hard to keep in their town, so it had only been a matter of time really. The only question now was who.

But Yvette already knew. Squeezing her motherโ€™s hand, Yvetteโ€™s stomach twisted into strangling knots. The nauseating guilt clawed at her with sharp, rusty claws as she recalled how just last week Guillaume had rapped on her window after curfew. How he had whispered of cutting phone lines and slashing tires, cheeks flushed with the thrill.

Guillaume had glowed with the hopeful euphoria of purpose that they had so badly been missing, and Yvette had only looked on with wondering admiration. Even as the rumors of messages sewn into shirt collars and murderous retribution fluttered through the town like dead leaves. Even as Yvette had witnessed informants passing their poisonous letters to the Germansโ€”turning in their countryman for no better reason than petty spite.

Why hadnโ€™t she asked Guillaume to stop? Demanded it of him. Begged him. 

They couldnโ€™t afford to be angry when survival already cost too much. For them, the war was already overโ€ฆ they had lost.

But it wasnโ€™t Guillaume they dragged into the square. Though his purpled face was almost too bruised to identify, Yvette could tell it wasnโ€™t her dearest friend, and she nearly collapsed with relief. 

โ€œItโ€™s Maurice Laurent,โ€ someone murmured.

Mauriceโ€™s mother screamed out from the crowd, fighting against the Germans in their gray uniforms as they restrained her. And a mix of shame and sorrow heated Yvetteโ€™s cheeks. Because of course, she knew the Laurents too. In a town so small, how could she not?

The Germans dragged Maurice to the churchโ€™s brick wall, allowing him to collapse to his knees, blood dripping from his swollen lips and his bludgeoned eyes too swollen to see.

โ€œThis terrorist was caught vandalizing official Reich materials,โ€ the dark-haired Captain Richter announced. Brandishing his pistol, he stalked in front of the crowd like a wolf terrorizing sheep. โ€œA crime punishable by death.โ€ 

Tearing down ridiculous propaganda. Yvette swallowed the clod of injustice that threatened to choke her. The highest of penalties for the smallest of rebellionsโ€”the price they paid for anger.

โ€œDuring questioning,โ€ Captain Richter continued, teeth flashing. โ€œHe informed us of an accomplice.โ€

They dragged another boy from the courthouse, and Yvetteโ€™s blood froze. 

Guillaume Bertrand hung between the towering Germans, his blackened eyes wide with fear above his bloodied nose. 

โ€œNo!โ€ Guillaumeโ€™s older sister, Marie, shrieked from the crowd, but her father held her fast, even as pain carved his grizzled face.

Yvetteโ€™s motherโ€™s hand tightened on her elbow. โ€œStay quiet, we barely know him,โ€ she whispered. The same mother that had kissed Guillaumeโ€™s cheeks and invited him into their home countless times. โ€œIf we bring attention to ourselves, they will take us as well.โ€

โ€œWhen accused, he insulted the Wehrmacht and refused to show remorse for his actions,โ€ Captain Richter said, his cold dark eyes glinting with some sort of reptilian satisfaction.

Yvette could scarcely breathe now, her eyes wide and her lungs paralyzed with shock. Guillaume had done nothing wrong. And he was but seventeenโ€”a year younger than her. And he was sweet and kind and full of hope. 

Now, there he sat, beaten and shivering in the brisk fall air. His last moments soaked in terror and sorrow and injustice. Blackness edged Yvetteโ€™s vision as Marieโ€™s cries mixed with Madame Laurentโ€™s, punctuating the lifeless silence of the crowd. 

โ€œAs such, he will serve as an example to those that resist the Reich.โ€

Her head spinning, Yvette pulled against her motherโ€™s grasp, longing to do something, to call out for Guillaume, to at least let him know she was there. To scream for someone, please God, do something. But her mother pulled Yvette against her instead, hiding her face in her chest.

And the gunshots shattered the square.

***

Captain Richter and his men walked up to the tailor shop as if nothing happened the day before. Outside the door, they smiled and joked to one another in their harsh mother tongue, their gray uniforms crisp and imposing.

Yvette prayed that they would pass by. That they were only looking in the window. But, as usual, God was silent, and Captain Richter opened the door with a bundle of cloth in his arms.

She could feel his gaze finding her in her corner, but she didnโ€™t look up. She couldnโ€™t. If she met his cold, glassy eyes, she would shatter into a million shards that her mother would have to sweep up.

Yvette stared at the garment in her hands instead, thrusting the needle into the dress again and again. But her mother was more practical of course. The rhythmic clacking of her sewing machine hushed, and she stood to greet the German.

โ€œCaptain Richter, how may I help you?โ€

โ€œI came across these fabrics and thought to make them a gift for my wife. Do you think you could turn them into something fashionable?โ€ 

He held them out. Though the style was a little dated, the fabrics were beautifulโ€”one a solid emerald green, the other a light floral pattern with pearl buttons, and the third a jazzy striped design. Yvette couldnโ€™t help but wonder where he had plundered them from. Was the owner of these dresses currently on a northbound train to one of the camps? Or was she already dead?

โ€œI donโ€™t have her exact measurements,โ€ Richterโ€™s dark eyes skated over to Yvette, โ€œbut her figure is much like your daughterโ€™s.โ€

Yvette had to force her hands to keep moving as hatred and fear snarled into frazzled tangles in her stomach.

Flattening a frown, her mother nodded. โ€œCome Yvette, see what you think.โ€

Yvette rose as her mother demanded. She lifted her chin in time to see Captain Richterโ€™s steely eyes running up and down her body. Her grip tightened on her needle.

โ€œMy daughter is a brilliant seamstress. Do you like the style of her dress? Itโ€™s quite the trend these days. The fabric is faded now, but she made it herself.โ€

โ€œIndeed,โ€ Capt Richter answered, stepping toward Yvette. โ€œIt is actually her very style that drew me to your shop in the first place. Her dresses always seem to stand out in the crowd.โ€

Yvette lowered her eyes, trying not to visibly stiffen as he ran a hand along the sleeve of her dress. Her gaze caught on the rust-colored bloodstain that marred his cuff. Guillaumeโ€™s blood. Mauriceโ€™s blood. The blood that paid for these dresses. It could have been one of them, or all of them, or so many more.

A hateful chill tingled along Yvetteโ€™s spine. She imagined herself ripping her arm away, raising her needle, and burying it deep into one of those granite eyes. But she only mumbled, โ€œYou should get your jacket laundered.โ€

He withdrew his hand, examining the stain. โ€œAh, so you are right, Mademoiselle.โ€

โ€œWeโ€™ll have the dresses in two weeks,โ€ her mother interjected, hands wringing.

โ€œThank you, Madame,โ€ he replied, reluctantly turning toward the door. โ€œTill tomorrow then.โ€ With the twist of an ugly smile, he left the shop and continued down the street with his men.

Yvette let out a shaky breath as her mother dropped the fabrics onto the table in front of her. โ€œIt wouldnโ€™t kill you to smile, Yvette.โ€

โ€œAh, so is that what you want of me?โ€ she snapped, her boiling fury finally overflowing. โ€œIt is not enough to mend their clothes, to make them dresses from the clothing of our dead, to let him put his hand on meโ€ฆโ€ Bile burned Yvetteโ€™s throat. โ€œโ€ฆBut you want me to hang on his arm as well, perhaps even follow him back to hisโ€””

โ€œEnough,โ€ her mother sighed. โ€œYou know I didnโ€™t mean that. This town is full of letters stained with othersโ€™ secrets. A smile can go a long way to allaying suspicion.โ€

โ€œIโ€™ve done nothing,โ€ Yvette hissed, stabbing her needle back into the dress.

โ€œNeither did Guillaume,โ€ her mother whispered.

Yvetteโ€™s needle paused, her fingers shaking.

โ€œI know you are angry and sad,โ€ her mother continued. โ€œBut you must put away these feelings. It is the only way to survive this.โ€ Her lower lip trembled. โ€œWith your father already gone, I cannot lose you too.โ€

Yvette let her mother wrap her in her arms, the bitter, unwanted tears flowing between the two of them. But even as she wept in her motherโ€™s anchoring embrace, she knew what her mother did not.

Yvette was already lost.

***

Yvette made sure the street was vacant before she knocked on the door. Marie Bertrand opened it, her red-rimmed eyes turning hard as took in the basket in Yvetteโ€™s hands.

โ€œWe donโ€™t accept food bought with German money,โ€ she sneered, turning to close the door.

โ€œWho is it?โ€ her father, Monsieur Bertrand, said, limping to the door. โ€œOh goodness, Yvette, does your mother know youโ€™re here?โ€

Yvette shook her head, and he glanced down the street. โ€œWell hurry in girl, you canโ€™t let them see you here.โ€

Yvette ducked in the doorway under Marieโ€™s upturned nose and walked into the small familiar kitchen. โ€œThese werenโ€™t bought,โ€ she murmured as she unloaded the vegetables onto the table. โ€œWe grew them in our garden.โ€ And after Guillaumeโ€™s death, their already meager rations were sure to be cut.

Monsieur Bertrand rested his calloused hand on her shoulder. โ€œThank you, my dear, we appreciate your kindness.โ€

Her basket empty, Yvette clasped her hands together. โ€œIโ€ฆ also wanted to apologize,โ€ she said thickly. โ€œI knew about Guillaumeโ€™sโ€ฆ activities. I shouldโ€™ve stopped him.โ€

The Bertrands stiffened. Yvette had just implicated herself. If they were to tell the Wehrmacht, they would take her away with no questions asked. She would disappear just like so many others.

Yvette swallowed. โ€œBut couldnโ€™t the resistance have done something to stop them?โ€

โ€œHush girl, even to speak such things is dangerous,โ€ Monsieur Bertrand said.

Marie crossed her arms. โ€œYou see what they did for a mere insult. Retaliation would cost more lives.โ€

โ€œThen why risk so much for so little?โ€ Yvette asked softly. โ€œIsnโ€™t it better to survive?โ€

โ€œTo survive in this misery is only to perpetuate this hell.โ€ Marie slammed her fist against the wood. โ€œHow we survive is just as important as how long.โ€

Bertrand reached out for his daughterโ€™s hand. โ€œThis is not the world I fought for.โ€ He shifted his stance, his fake wooden leg clunking against the floor. โ€œSo we will continue to fight in any way we can. No matter how small. No matter the price. To do otherwise would be to let the sacrifices of so many go in vain. We fight on for Guillaume.โ€

Yvette nodded, Monsieur Bertrandโ€™s words speaking to a truth that perhaps she had known once but had been forgotten in a coat of dust. Swept away and locked up with the others that wouldโ€™ve spoken the same. Silenced with bullets and soldiers and trains to nowhere.

โ€œI will fight too.โ€ Yvette squeezed the basketโ€™s rough handle. โ€œFor Guillaume.โ€

Marie snorted. โ€œYou? Youโ€™re but a girl sewing patches on Nazi uniforms and taking their money with a smile.โ€

No, never with a smile. 

Bertrand squeezed Yvetteโ€™s arm. โ€œIโ€™m afraid Marie might be right. Iโ€™ve seen how Capt Richter looks at you. If youโ€™ve already caught his attentionโ€ฆ itโ€™ll be too risky.โ€

โ€œItโ€™s my risk to take.โ€

โ€œUntil you talk,โ€ Marie snapped. โ€œThen weโ€™re all at risk.โ€

โ€œI wouldnโ€™t,โ€ Yvette protested.

โ€œOh my girl,โ€ Bertrand said, pity creasing his face. โ€œThey would have you confessing to things you didnโ€™t even do.โ€

Yvette thought of the bloodstain on Richterโ€™s cuff, thought of his hand on her armโ€”and her doubts calcified into resolve. โ€œI can take care of Richter. All I need is a chance.โ€

Bertrand and Marie shared a look.

โ€œSheโ€™s not a safe bet,โ€ Marie whispered.

โ€œIf it was safe, it wouldnโ€™t be a bet.โ€ Bertrand shrugged his large shoulders. โ€œWhat do you need, girl?โ€

โ€œA secret.โ€

***

Yvetteโ€™s plan was simple. Sheโ€™d turned it over in her mind again and again, searching for the snags and fraying edges, but it held firm all the same, if only just barely. As she went through the motions, so small were they, she could even pretend they werenโ€™t dangerous. She was only taking Captain Richterโ€™s dresses to be laundered. She was only sewing another stitch. She was only writing another letter.

But still, when the Wehrmacht issued another summons to the square, that same wave of suffocating nausea threatened to unravel her. She had failed somehow. Perhaps they had been following her. They knew. How could they not? She was just a girl after all.

With her motherโ€™s arm through hers, and the crowd bunching tightly together, Yvette could barely lift her eyes to the line of Germans facing the village square. Marie found her gaze first, her eyes tight and worried. But where was Monsieur Bertrand? Panic rising, her breaths wheezed out in strangled gasps.

โ€œKeep yourself together, girl,โ€ her mother whispered. โ€œOr they will take you for just looking guilty.โ€

Her motherโ€™s fingers tightened around her hand, and Yvette sucked in deep lungfuls of air. Even if she didnโ€™t survive this, she had to be brave. Like Guillaume had been.

At last, her courage mustered beneath her, Yvette searched for Captain Richterโ€™s predatory smirk in the overcast afternoon.

But he wasnโ€™t there. An unfamiliar Major glared at the crowd instead and waved a letter. Yvette didnโ€™t have to look closer to know it disclosed the rumor of a German spy, the warning written with her own left hand.

โ€œHave faith, Frenchmen,โ€ he shouted. โ€œThe Reich will root out weakness wherever it shall be found. From without,โ€ he turned to his soldiers, โ€œor within.โ€

And then the Germans were dragging Captain Richter into the square, buttons missing, uniform ripped from where someone had ripped out the code roughly sewn into the collar with uneven stitchesโ€”the mark of an amateur. Certainly not a professional tailor. Blood dripped from his face to stain his battered uniform once again. But not Mauriceโ€™s blood this time, not Guillaumeโ€™s bloodโ€”it was his own blood.

Yvette found Marieโ€™s eyes again, and this time they glinted with approval as her father limped to her side. Still, Yvette did not smile as they shoved Richter against the wall, did not feel an ounce of joy as the Major lifted his Luger. But nor did she look away as the shot rang through the air.

This small vengeance hadnโ€™t rescued Guillaume, or Maurice, or the owner of the beautiful dresses. But it had saved Yvette. She was no longer just surviving. The war had just begun.

And she was fighting.


Thanks for reading! This short story didn’t place, but the judges’ feedback is below!

 WHAT THE JUDGES LIKED ABOUT YOUR STORY

{2107}  The tension of the first scene is nicely echoed in the events of the last scene, the mirroring of the first execution and the second is a clever touch. The fear and frustration felt by the French under occupation is also evoked well, and clearly explicated in the character and dialogue of Yvette’s mother and Marie Bertrand.

{2071}  A very tightly written, succinct story that packed a moral punch too. Indeed the moral quandaries of Yvette, and other minor characters, are well teased out in such a short piece. I feel the author reakises that we are in familiar ground – WW2, Nazi occupied France, to resist or not – and so the combination of showing the moral choices to be made and then a very original final twist lifted this story significantly above the usual terrain.

{2022}  The scene in which Captain Richter enters the shop is terrific and chilling. So much menace is held in the way he looks at Yvette.  

WHAT THE JUDGES FEEL NEEDS WORK

{2107}  Yvette’s act of revenge is left largely unclear and how Richter is implicated is not sufficiently explained – the moment of justice therefore lacks the thrill of success as it’s not clear what has been succeed in.Consider also giving a little more contextual detail, such as where in France the action takes place and what the village looks like – historical fiction benefits from these kinds of details.

{2071}  Though Yvette is a good character we are perhaps left a little short on her actual emotions. Indeed the whole piece could benefit from more emotion, more if the raw and conflicting emotions noted that informs ultimate decisions to act or not.

{2022}  It’s clear that Guillaume and his family are part of the resistance, but it isn’t clear what he was doing when he was caught by the Germans. This initially puzzled me and somewhat distracted me from the scene of his execution.

***

Thanks for reading!

How I streamlined my writing process

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Soโ€ฆ I used to consider myself a โ€œTurtle Writer.โ€ And, my friends, it took me 8 years from when I started the first draft of my first book to when I published it. My second novel took me 4 years from start to publish.

For comparison, for my next release, Timeโ€™s Orphan, there will be 11 months between starting and publishing. And for my YA sci-fi launching in April, there were around 15 months from starting to when Whimsical Publishing acquired it.

And trust me, my two newest books are *way* better than my first two novels. (I still love my first two, but objectively, Iโ€™m a much better writer than I was 10 years ago, thank goodness.)

There are much faster writers than me out there, and much slower ones, but in any case, I halved my writing process time from Book 1 to Book 2, and by Book 8, I will have cut the time by 88%. One of my writing friends recently asked how I made that happen, so I thought Iโ€™d break it down here.

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Why did my first two books take so long?

This answerโ€™s pretty easy. First, I didnโ€™t actually believe I would publish it. I thought it was unsavable, and I thought by writing it, I had accomplished my writing goals, so I shelved it.

In 2017, I picked it back up, but I was still lost. I revised and edited as best as I could, but I wasnโ€™t until I found the writing community on twitter, that I even thought about getting critique partners and an editor. After getting that feedback, I ended up *heavily* revising the first half of the book.

And there so many stops and starts during that time. I would say itโ€™s because life got busy, which is true, but itโ€™s also because I hadnโ€™t found a rhythm. And more importantly, I still was unsure of my commitment to writing. I still thought Odrielโ€™s Heirs would be the only book I would ever write. (Oh, silly me. ๐Ÿ˜‚)

With the second book, I found indie author friends online as well as consistent critique partners, and that changed everything.

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So what happened with the third book?

We can break it out into a few important eureka moments:

  • I gained confidence. Iโ€™d put myself out there, been rejected dozens of times, had a few reviews that smarted, but had a lot more that encouraged me forward. With all that under my belt, I no longer had that paralyzing fear of failure that had kept me back. Even if the next book doesnโ€™t get picked up by an agent, I can publish it myself โ€“ and thatโ€™s still very fulfilling to me.

  • Also, I realized I could work on multiple WIPs at one time. This was absolutely crucial. Right now I have *FIVE* (๐Ÿ˜ฑ) WIPs โ€“ querying one, editing two, revising one, and plotting one. I cycle through them to give myself some perspective when I come back through drafts, and that way I can always be working on one thing while Iโ€™m waiting on responses to queries, CP feedback, editor feedback, etc.

  • Juggling WIPs also forced me to establish a process that worked for me. My experience allowed me to come up with realistic timelines and goals for myself to meet. Itโ€™s incredibly motivating for me to cross things off my list, and it lets me see the things I have to look forward to.

  • I found CPs & Betas I can depend on, and in a pinch, I knew how to find others quickly (psst critiquematch.com). Their objective feedback is invaluable to help me find problems EARLY in the process so I donโ€™t get into the editing phase and have a huge โ€œOh Sh*tโ€ moment. They also continued to teach me valuable writing lessons, and I hone my own editing skills on their work as well. These relationships are also a bulwark of support and encouragement which is also vital to a process heavy in critique.

  • I studied up on writing craft books which have given me epiphanies that also helping in every phase of the journey. But most critically, Save the Cat Writes the Novel gave me the framework I needed to learn how to plot effectively. Once again, it allowed me to identify problems very early, which eliminated a lot of time-consuming rewriting.

  • Inertia is powerful. I am *not* an every day writer by any meansโ€ฆ but I usually do something writer-related (almost) every day, even if itโ€™s something incredibly small like a tweet-sized story for vss365. The most difficult part of writing for me is starting *anything.* So by keeping that positive pressure, I can keep rolling without mentally having to do the thing where I show up to write and think โ€œUmโ€ฆ how do I do this again?”

Anyways, those are just the tips that have worked for me. Ultimately, every writing speed is completely valid. As long as youโ€™re enjoying the journey, thatโ€™s whatโ€™s most important.

Thanks for reading! I hope this was helpful, and if you have any other questions, let me know!

Book Playlists!

Music Meets Books!

So, I’m not a musically inclined person by nature, but I decided to try to make some playlists for my books, and I absolutely loved it! Listening to the playlists added this whole other dimension and put me right into the book so I could experience the scene play out. So cool! Naturally, since it was so awesome, I had to share. Below, are the playlists for the entire Odriel’s Heirs series, and I’ll be sure to add them to their page on this site. I’ll also release the playlists for Codename: CNDRLA and my 2023 sci-fi closer to publication!

I hope you enjoy them and as always, I’d love to hear your suggestions and recommendations if you have any!

Odriel’s Heirs

Burning Shadows

Idriel’s Children

Night of Ash

Time’s Orphan

Night of Ash out 27 Sep & Time’s Orphan release in February!

Thanks for reading!

Hey, why’d you redesign your covers?

So the big news this week is that I got my Odriel’s Heirs and Idriel’s Children covers redesigned! And so many people have asked me why, I figured I’d write a post about it (mostly because I’m too tired tonight to do anything else productive. ๐Ÿ˜‚)

So when I first was looking for a cover designer for Odriel’s Heirs, I’d never commissioned art of ANY kind before, and at the time, I thought Odriel’s Heirs would be the only book I ever wrote. (Seven books later, let’s all laugh together. ๐Ÿคฃ)

So, I wanted something that could double as both character art and a cover. And although Dominique Wesson did a fabulous job of capturing the characters… based on anonymous feedback from NetGalley, the original cover designs were getting somewhere around a C-. Ouch. And to add to that, my BookBub deal requests kept getting rejected, and I suspected it had to do with the covers.

Fast forward to 2022, and the original cover designer is crazy busy and almost impossible to schedule, and I’m no longer a huge fan of seeing the character’s faces on the cover. I’d rather give the reader more flexibility to imagine the characters and commission character art separately, like the wonderful pieces by @stephydrawsart_ below. (But if you ever want to make my LIFE, I adore fanart.)

Anyways… Of course, I wanted all of the covers to match, so I briefly considered trying to get a character art cover similar to my first too… but then I saw Fay Lane’s work and totally fell in love.

And now here we are! I’m also hoping that the new covers will expand my audience, and I can still use the original covers as marketing or promotional tools. Maybe one day, I’ll shell out for a character art cover of Time’s Orphan so I can have two complete sets. But for now, I’m so thrilled with the new look and can’t wait to see them all in print together before too long!

The new paperbacks of Odriel’s & Idriel’s are now available on Amazon, and I’m hoping to release Time’s Orphan advance review copies in the fall!

As always, thanks for reading!

How to Survive the Query Trenches

Look it’s me in the query trenches! ๐Ÿ˜‚

So, (disclaimer) I’ve never received an offer of representation, but I’ve done a lot of a LOT of querying over the last three years, and shockingly, I’m still alive and at it. So, I thought I’d share a trick or two on how to stay positive and make the process as painless as possible

Please keep in mind this is just my personal querying philosophy which may or may not work for you. As always, take what’s helpful and leave the rest!

1. USE Querytracker

I use the free version to filter for agents seeking my genre/age group. For example, I’m in the middle of querying a YA sci-fi. So I searched for agents interested in young adult and science fiction, and only queried the ones interested in both. (But not before reading their bio and manuscript wishlist first… and everyone else’s in their agency to make sure I was querying the right one.) Honestly, after three young adult books, if an agent has even thought about repping YA, I’ve probably read their bio. ๐Ÿ˜‚

Since I use the free version of querytracker, I also make a giant spreadsheet to keep track of agent name, agency, and query date, to make sure I don’t double query anyone or any agencies.

2. keep your query files updated and ready

Specifically, I have a folder with these files: query, synopsis, first three chapters, first 10 pages, first 20 pages, first 50 pages, and first chapter. Also, I save any other questions they ask me in case another agent asks the same thing.

This is what I have so far for my current querying manuscript: pitch, audience, similar titles, why I’m the right person to write this book, movie/show comp titles, a line about my MC, who would play my MC, the theme song for my book, and the inspiration for my book.

Pessimist?

3. Keep Expectations low. always.

Okay, so, maybe I’m a pessimist, but this one is important to me, because I have gotten quite a few full requests now on multiple novels, and… none of them panned out. Some of them even came back with positive feedback (but still a rejection), and there are also quite a few that I never got a response on at all! And I am painfully aware that even if I get an agent one day, my book still may not sell.

Keeping my expectations low is how I keep myself from getting crushed with every rejection, and maybe one day I’ll be shocked out of my socks with an offer of rep. But… right now, I treat query letters like lottery tickets, and keep on keepin’ on.

4. Know what comes after

So there are really three parts to this.

A. Have at least a rough idea of how long you will query for.

Because you could non-figuratively query one work for your whole life: query one agent, wait 3 months and CNR (closed: no response), revise, and then query the next agent. And that’s totally okay! Just have a strategy going in.

B. Know what comes after.

Will you heavily revise and re-query down the road? Will you shelve the work and query something else? Will you self-publish?

Knowing what comes next helps reduce the fear of rejection. It helps to remind us that rejection is not the end, but merely the next step of the journey.

C. Work on something else while you wait!

This is pretty common advice, but SO true. If I find myself excited to wrap up querying on book ABC so that I can query book DEF (because I’ve grown as a writer, this book is my best yet, and it’s TOTALLY the one!) then this strategy has succeeded (again.)

Make a friend along the way

Because there are a lot of us querying writers out there (Just check out #amquerying on Twitter), and nothing quite takes the sting off rejection like commiserating with a friend. So, find your Sam, Frodo, go throw that query into Mt Doom… and then, you know, maybe one day, Sauron will offer to represent you.

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Wait a minute, I think this analogy went wrong somewhere… ๐Ÿ˜‚

Anyways, keep laughing & try to enjoy the journey. Because there will always be another Mt Doom to climb (or something ๐Ÿ˜‚.)

Actual me after three years and four novels in the query trenches… and still working on the next one (which is totally going to be THE ONE. ๐Ÿ˜‰)

Thanks for reading! And if you have any other querying tips you’d like to add, feel free to comment below!